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diff --git a/_people-use-web/user-stories-seven.md b/_people-use-web/user-stories-seven.md
index 891e24c..ad42edd 100644
--- a/_people-use-web/user-stories-seven.md
+++ b/_people-use-web/user-stories-seven.md
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ Introduction about Noor
 
 Noor is a teenager who was born deaf and with typical vision. She recently became legally blind too. Noor has some residual vision and can see small portions of a computer screen when it is significantly enlarged. She communicates using sign language and a portable electronic Braille device.
 
-As a high school senior, Noor is thinking about what she wants to do in the future. She is considering different colleges in the hopes of studying the history of fashion. She is trying to find out about how the college presents teaching material for students and is in contact with a few colleges to discuss captions and transcripts of audio-visual content. She is also keen to understand whether the college websites will work with her Braille display. She has had problems in the past being able to submit coursework because the form buttons weren't recognised by here device. Noor’s portable electronic Braille notetaker includes a calendar, e-mail, web browsing, and note-taking functionality which she wants to make sure can be integrated with the college systems.
+As a high school senior, Noor is thinking about what she wants to do in the future. She is considering different colleges in the hopes of studying the history of fashion. She is trying to find out about how the college presents teaching material for students and is in contact with a few colleges to discuss captions and transcripts of audio-visual content. She is also keen to understand whether the college websites will work with her Braille display. She has had problems in the past being able to submit coursework because the form buttons weren't recognised by her device. Noor’s portable electronic Braille notetaker includes a calendar, e-mail, web browsing, and note-taking functionality which she wants to make sure can be integrated with the college systems.
 
 Noor enjoys getting out and about with her friends and uses public transport a lot. She will plan out her route before heading out and then use her mobile device to track where she is and where she needs to be. The biggest problem she has with this is that the bus schedules don't respond well to being zoomed. When she enlarges the text it doesn't reflow or wrap properly. This means some of the text gets hidden and she has to scroll a lot around the page. Maps can be really hard as well but she does have an app that gives route instructions in text as well as displaying the route on a map.
 

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Suggested change

	title: "Presentation distingushing and understanding"
	title: "Presentation distinguishing and understanding"

[shawna-slh]

deploy preview failed because of the dependency change in Nov-Dec 2022, so it should be fairly easy to fix. /me focusing on other stuff right now...

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diff --git a/_people-use-web/user-stories-four.md b/_people-use-web/user-stories-four.md
index c4afa58..326cbba 100644
--- a/_people-use-web/user-stories-four.md
+++ b/_people-use-web/user-stories-four.md
@@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ footer: >
   <div>
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-Lexie is an older adult who loves online shopping and fantasy football. Lexie cannot see all colors equally well. Websites and apps that rely on colors alone present barriers for Lexie. Using color alone to highlight text and to indicate areas in a chart also present barriers for Lexie but fortunately her work colleagues have learned ways for using other visual markers in addition to color.
+Lexie is an older adult who loves online shopping and fantasy football. Lexie cannot see all colors equally well. Websites and apps that rely on color alone present barriers for Lexie. Using color alone to highlight text and to indicate areas in a chart also present barriers for Lexie. Fortunately her work colleagues have learned ways for using other visual markers in addition to color.
 
 {::options toc_levels="2..2" /}
 
@@ -138,11 +138,11 @@ Lexie is an older adult who loves online shopping and fantasy football. Lexie ca
 
 ## About Lexie
 
-> Sometimes completing the check out process is tricky because if I overlook a mandatory field, I get an error or warning message in red and it’s hard for me to see the message".
+> Sometimes completing the check out process is tricky because if I overlook a mandatory field, I get an error or warning message in red and it’s hard for me to see the message.
 
-Lexie was born with deuteranopia and protanopia (often called "color blindness"). She has difficulty distinguishing among items that are red, green, orange, and brown, all of which appear to him as kind of murky brown.
+Lexie was born with deuteranopia and protanopia (often called "color blindness"). She has difficulty distinguishing among items that are red, green, orange, and brown, all of which appear to her as kind of murky brown.
 
-Lexie discovered that shopping for clothes online is actually an advantage over going to physical stores. In addition to just showing pictures of items in the various colors offered, her favorite sites include color labels making coordinating what goes together much easier. Sometimes when checking out though, the required fields and error messages are notated with a red outline and Lexie has to pay special attention to identify them. She noticed lately, however, that a lot of sites are getting better about using a secondary notation like an asterisk for required fields and bold text or an arrow pointing to errors. This really helps a lot.
+Lexie discovered that shopping for clothes online is actually an advantage over going to physical stores. In addition to just showing pictures of items in the various colors offered, her favorite sites include color labels. That makes coordinating what goes together much easier. Sometimes, when checking out, though, the required fields and error messages are notated with a red outline and Lexie has to pay special attention to identify them. She noticed lately, however, that a lot of sites are getting better about using a secondary notation like an asterisk for required fields and bold text or an arrow pointing to errors. This really helps a lot.
 
 Lexie plays in various fantasy football leagues with her friends and former workmates. Sometimes there can be problems with the way these sites use color to differentiate between teams, player positions, and whether or not players are selected for her team. As a result, she tends to prefer certain Fantasy Football apps that don't use color as the only way to indicate information that is important to playing. This means she has to try and convince friends to play using the same app.
 
@@ -153,11 +153,11 @@ Using color only barrier
 : **Works well:** "Color choices are shown with a descriptive name. The good sites have a link to a slightly longer description of the color."
 
 Color only used for errors barrier
-: **Problem:** "When filling out a form online, required fields and errors are marked with a red outline." 
-: **Works well:** "In addition to color, an asterisk or words are used to identify required fields and errors."
+: **Problem:** "When filling out a form online, required fields as well as errors are marked with a red outline." 
+: **Works well:** "In addition to color, an asterisk or words identify required fields as well as errors."
 
 Color only in games barrier
-: **Problem:** "When I play an online game, enemies are marked with a red circle and friends marked with a green circle and I can't tell the difference."
+: **Problem:** "When I play an online game, enemies are marked with a red circle and friends with a green circle and I can't tell the difference."
 : **Works well:** "Enemies are also marked with a symbol/use a red triangle so I can easily identify them."
 
 Chart labels barrier

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diff --git a/_people-use-web/user-stories-nine.md b/_people-use-web/user-stories-nine.md
index 35be1c4..50f1ed6 100644
--- a/_people-use-web/user-stories-nine.md
+++ b/_people-use-web/user-stories-nine.md
@@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ footer: >
   <div>
 {:/}
 
-Elias is an active 85-year old retiree. Over the years, Elias has been developing low vision, hand tremor, and mild short-term memory loss. He uses digital technologies to stay in touch with his family, read the news, follow his interests in architecture, and order groceries. However, inadequately designed websites and apps present barriers for Elias, and prevent him from these activities.
+Elias is an active 85-year old retiree. Over the years, Elias has developed low vision, hand tremor, and mild short-term memory loss. He uses digital technologies to stay in touch with his family, read the news, follow his interests in architecture, and order groceries. However, inadequately designed websites and apps present barriers for Elias, and prevent him from doing these activities.
 
 {::options toc_levels="2..2" /}
 
@@ -164,8 +164,8 @@ Distracting animations
 : **Works well:** "Allow me to stop any animation on the screen so I can concentrate on what I'm looking at."
 
 Tables don't zoom well
-: **Problem:** "Online tables sometimes have a lot of space between the columns and when I'm zoomed it, I have scroll from left to right to see all of the content and I often miss the association from one column to the next."
-: **Works well:** "When I zoom the tables change from lots of columns to being presented more like a list with each row being shown as a list item."
+: **Problem:** "Online tables sometimes have a lot of space between the columns. When I'm zoomed in, I have to scroll from left to right to see all of the content and I often miss how one column relates to the next."
+: **Works well:** "When I zoom, the tables change from lots of columns to being presented more like a list with each row showing up as a list item."
 
 Breadcrumb
 : **Problem:** "I often lose my place on websites. Sometimes I follow several links and it's not what I'm looking for. I can use the back button to go back page by page but I still get lost."
@@ -173,7 +173,7 @@ Breadcrumb
 
 Login page
 : **Problem:** "I have accounts with so many different websites that sometimes I forget my password."
-: **Works well:** "An option to remember my password for this site and a means of resetting my password if I need to."
+: **Works well:** "The website provides an option to remember my password for this site and a means of resetting my password if I need to."
 
 ## Assistive technologies and adaptive strategies used
 

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